I have spent a lot of
time trying to imagine how I could get on a speed dating. Thanks to my efforts and imagination I have
done it. And now I want to introduce you my story.
I was on a walk in a
town one day, when a terrible rain started. I ran to the nearest café in order
to hide from the rain. It turned out that there was a speed dating in this
place and they didn’t have enough girls for this event. So workers of this café
persuaded me to take part too.
I felt myself very
uncomfortable there. At that time I knew nothing about speed dating. I thought
that only people with low self-esteem attend such meetings.
The first boy I have
met was a nerd, who always told me about his achievements in physics and maths.
At the middle of our communication he asked me some formulas which I didn’t
know. Then he said that I was silly and changed partner.
Then I communicated
with a boy with red hair, who told me about his Irish roots, with a drummer who
beat out a rhythm with his fingers and with a boy who had more make-up on his
face than I.
The last boy was a
football player and I was glad that I finally met someone with same interests.
It turned out that he was also a fan of “Shakhtar” and we decided to watch next
match together.
So my first experience
of speed-dating was so good. I have understood that there we can meet people
with same interests and find new friends.
What a wonderful story!
ReplyDeleteIt is better to say:
*" I was walking " instead of " I was on a walk"
*" I felt uncomfortable" instead of I felt myself uncomfortable"
It is better to use:
* Past Perfect → "At that time I knew nothing about speed dating" if you mean " до цього часу я нічого не знала про швидкі побачення"
* with THE same interests
Oh, Alena, I agree with you.
ReplyDeleteSo, I remember, that after "feel" we can not say "myself".
Then, From my point of view, it is better to say "had communication or conversation" instead "communicated".
In general, I think you English is well and I can not find additional mistakes.
Your story is like a beginning of some film - that`s really great!
ReplyDeleteSome mistakes were alredy mentioned above, so I`ll write a few more:
1) "Who always told me" - it is better to say "kept on telling me".
2) "Then I communicated with a boy with red hair" - in order not to repeat the word "with" you may say "red", "carrot top", "sandy haired" or "red-haired".
3) "So my first experience of speed-dating was so good" - you should use any adverb instead of word "so", as there is no comparison in this sentence.