To tell you the truth, it was awful. I`ll never go for it again. Of course, the cafe was wonderful. There was lovely furniture and good service, but partners... So a few words about them:
- He seemed to be a simple boy. He resembled 90% boys who exist on the Earth. We had a chat. And he wanted to show that he was a ster, but failed it. He said: "Oce I was shown on the TV, really. I gave an interview when I was in a juvie".
- He was as nice as a picture. His eyes were blue, he had chestnut hair, he was tall. But he was old-fashioned and his manners seemed to be taken after robots. As it happened he was a dancer. To cut a long story short, it`s not my type of men.
- He wasn`t alone. His dog was with him. He said the dog always slept with him. I imagined myself to be the third and felt blue.
- The next one was really cheerful. His name was Ahmed. He invited me to his shop which was working all day long and promised to treat me with kebab or shawerma.
- That time I met a beautiful man. As for his way of life, he slept half a day and then played computer games. He told me a lot about DOTA2, TTHE WOLRD OF TANKS and so on and so forth.
- That one was yoga. So I got to know something new about "right" hairstyles, a special diet which was "the rightest one in the whole world" and even some facts about useful heroin, as a matter of fact.
- The seventh one was a body-builder. So there was no themes to speak about except for his strong ans handsome body.
- The next one was a gispy. He had five golden teeth. He was a really happy person, but he should marry a gisoy. So his aim was only to have fun.
- The ninth one was a nationalist. Everything had passed well untill my phone rang and the melody was: "Everything is for you" by Stas Mikhaylov. Thanks to God, I am still alive.
- And the last one wasn`t less strange. He said that it was important to try everything when you are young. So he had an experience of eatig snakes, smoaking foam plastic, doing dog-enjoyment and now he wanted to try different types of women. By the way, why not to try to be a kind person? I didn`t manage to understand him.
Hi,Diana:)Your story was very interesting and funny for me)))I was in a good mood after reading about your"boyfriends"😆.And the picture in the end also made me happy)))
ReplyDeleteThere are some mistakes,but they are not significant.You had to write "star","once","jury ","Gypsy(Gipsy)".I even couldn't name them mistakes,because they are just slips of the pen:))And as for me it would be better to write"to marry a Gypsy woman"
And maybe "yogi"( I am absolutely sure that you wrote so by chance)
DeleteThe history is outstanding. Somehow it has remained me the song of famous Ukrainian girls-band “Attempt № 5“). The characters are unforgettable, but at the same time recognizable. I also liked that the text is structured.
ReplyDeleteBut the are some grammar problems, even without mentioning all the misprints, which are need to be solved:
Firstly, you should pay more attention to the tenses you use. Mostly you use Past Simple, but sometimes forget about it, as in this sentence: “He resembled 90% boys who exist on the Earth.” Here should be “existed”. Also in this sentence, better to use “that”, as it is characterize the person.
There also some mistake with the sequence of tenses in the part “his manners seemed to be taken after robots”. Past simple must be used with Past Perfect. So “his manners seemed to had been taken after robot”.
That was the biggest mistakes that I had found. But I can advise you to pay more attention to articles, and the words you have used. But the text is impressive and understandable, so the main aim was achieved.
Best wishes, Daryna Piven